Thursday, September 5, 2013

...suddenly I heard a crack.. Once there was a girl named Rosy and her mums name was Ana an her dads name was Ken. She had a older brothers and one sister. Named Rose. And rosy went to middle School. one day she walk home excitedly because it was her birthday today. she wondered what would her birthday cake look like and what she would have for dinner. she just remembered that she had a friend coming over for a sleep over. When she got home she smelt her favourite dinner an she saw her cake but it was covered her then she heard a horn beep it was her friend . her friend name was Hannah when every think was finished they went to her bedroom but while they were sleeping there was a crack when they woke up in the morning dad fixed and they lived happily .

1 comment:

  1. Great writing Manaia!
    I love your WOW word 'excitedly"! Great job including this word within your sentence. Is there anywhere else you can add a WOW word?
    Also- check where you have used fullstops. Is there any you would change?
    Mrs Natusch

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