Lost in a corn filed
One day i went to the corn maze with my friend Emily. We packed our bags and went. And as we got further into the maze we found gold it was as shinny as the sun and as gold as the corn in the corn field. The next row was 10 chickens they looked really picky so we past them. And saw one BIG BIG monster on the next row so we ran past him. Next was one two three BIG chocolate cakes so we took a plate and munched it on the way then we noticed we were trapped. AAA I and Emily scremmed there was a big shinny light to be continued...
One day i went to the corn maze with my friend Emily. We packed our bags and went. And as we got further into the maze we found gold it was as shinny as the sun and as gold as the corn in the corn field. The next row was 10 chickens they looked really picky so we past them. And saw one BIG BIG monster on the next row so we ran past him. Next was one two three BIG chocolate cakes so we took a plate and munched it on the way then we noticed we were trapped. AAA I and Emily scremmed there was a big shinny light to be continued...
Hi Manaia
ReplyDeleteI love your writing! I'm so proud of you writing on your blog in the holidays!
This is the story you started in class wasn't it? Well done for finishing it and publishing it by yourself!
What an exciting story! I like how your characters go on an adventure through a corn maze.
Next time you could use speech marks to show when your characters are speaking.
From Mrs Natusch